Correcting Needless Sentence Fragments in Paragraphs

Correcting Needless Sentence Fragments in Paragraphs This exercise offers practice in identifying and correcting needless sentence fragments during the editing stage of the writing process. Instructions The following descriptive paragraph contains three needless sentence fragments. First, identify the three fragments, and then correct each oneeither by attaching it to an adjacent sentence or by turning the fragment itself into a complete sentence. When youre done, compare your corrected sentences with those in the edited version of the paragraph below Anthony (unedited draft) My five-year-old son Anthony is built like a little wind-up toy. His black curly hair, bushy eyebrows, a cute button nose, and chubby cheeks, which people cant resist pinching. These make him look like a life-size teddy bear. Anthony loves to wear his favorite black leather jacket with the image of Mumble the penguin on the back. And jeans with patches on the knees as a result of the holes he puts in them while crawling on the floor, pushing his toy cars around. Indeed, he is a very energetic little boy. In one afternoon, he will ride his bicycle, play video games, complete a 200-piece jigsaw puzzle, and, of course, play with his toy cars. In fact, his energy scares me sometimes. For example, that time on the roof. He shinnied up a tree and jumped onto the roof. However, he wasnt energetic (or bold) enough to climb back down, and so I had to rescue my wonderful little wind-up toy. Here is the edited version of Anthony, the descriptive paragraph that served as the model for the sentence-fragment editing exercise. Keep in mind that there are multiple ways of correcting the three fragments in the exercise. Anthony (edited version) My five-year-old son Anthony is built like a little wind-up toy.  He has black curly hair, bushy eyebrows, a cute button nose, and chubby cheeks, which people cant resist pinching.  These make him look like a life-size teddy bear. Anthony loves to wear his favorite black leather jacket with the image of Mumble the penguin on the back  and his favorite jeans, the ones with patches on the knees. The patches cover the holes that came about from crawling on the floor, pushing his toy cars around.  Indeed, he is a very energetic little boy. In one afternoon, he will ride his bicycle, play video games, complete a 200-piece jigsaw puzzle, and, of course, play with his toy cars. In fact, his energy scares me sometimes.  For example, I will never forget that time he shinnied up a tree and jumped onto the roof.  However, he wasnt energetic (or bold) enough to climb back down, and so I had to rescue my wonderful little wind-up toy.